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Make it Like Poetry: Untitled

Anyone who knows me knows I love music–from old school to new school. I love anything that has great lyrics and something to say, excellent vocal and musical arrangement, artistry, word play and interesting word choice–and sometimes I’m just another simpleton satisfied with a good beat. But this poem is about the great jazz or a great era. It’s also about Mr. Perfect.

Not too long after Mr. P. and I started dating– which was whirlwind thing, sort of; we connected and clicked as if we had been deep in friendship our whole lives–he had a birthday. He had gotten me a very nice Christmas gift and included this really beautiful card the month before, and I hadn’t gotten him anything. I wasn’t expecting to get anything, as we had just started “talking” as the kids said when I was a kid. Anyway, I wanted to do something special for his  birthday, and I bought him a gift and wasn’t happy with it. I couldn’t find a card to say what I wanted, either. Then I thought “wait; I write stuff!” I knew he liked jazz, so I made him a jazz CD and included this poem. It sucks. Enjoy!

When you listen to the saxophone

Wailing and moaning its sad siren song

And Sara’s voice blows smoke rings,

Don’t go proposing with them.

When the piano keys unlock

Just the right note to fit between

Left ear and right

And Ella’s voice spins blankets that

Block out the chill of night,

Remain upright; your knees will want to bend—

I understand.

It melts something in me too.

If you listen closely to

That space in between

Ella’s weaving, Sara’s voice smoking,

And pay attention when the saxophones

Snivel instead of wail and the strings

Are taunt with waiting, then

That intake of breath you hear,

The pulsing you feel around you, that

Crushing, pressing in of everything vital inside you—

Is that you, me, or the music?

Has anticipation choked you with song,

Or is the hope suffocating you?

I tried to find the kind

Of card that said how I felt

That could hold my heart

Heavy with its ponderings,

One marked “Fragile” “Handle with Care”—

They don’t sell cautious hope at Hallmark.

Maybe you needed to hear me say it.

Listen carefully;

Don’t let the music melt you or mold you.

Don’t let it cradle you; don’t trust it.

Search it; it’s hiding


*See, this wasn’t as in your face as the last poem.

5 thoughts on “Make it Like Poetry: Untitled

  1. Aw, I like it (: And jazz music is amazing. Hahah. I think it’s nice to make gifts like that (: I wrote my best friend a poem for Christmas.

  2. That was a BEAUTIFUL poem! Seriously, it was ironic, witty, funny, intelligent and not cliche at all. You said this was going to suck! I’m very unhappy with you…lol!!!


    P.S.- That was really good, I mean, really, quite good, no wonder he stuck around! 🙂

    1. LOL, it doesn’t count because I crossed it out! I’m so glad you liked the poem…took me forever to write and almost didn’t send it…had to throw it in the envelope and seal it up before I could rethink it!

  3. Um…that didn’t suck at all. In fact it was beautiful. My favorite line is “They don’t sell cautious hope at Hallmark.”

    1. I love that line too! Hallmark doesn’t sell a lot of things, I find…you can’t say everything with a greeting card.

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